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Review:adluvshp says:
Hello. This is AditiDraco95 from the forums with your challenge review! (I am reading and reviewing all challenge entries before I judge them).

I am going to be reading and reviewing first 3-4 chapters of this fic :)

I liked the way you started off, the insight into Dorcas was detailed and yet not dragged out. Her relationship with her sister was also well crafted. I liked her demeanour as an auror too, I think you have created her well.

I can see your plot building here, and I think I can say it is headed in a good direction that I like. Your scene flow, characters, and narrative over all was quite good. There were hardly any grammar mistakes too. I would just suggest to fix up your spacing issues as they can be slightly distracting.

Apart from that, this was a very nice opening chapter and I quite liked it. I am now moving on to the next!

Good work!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello!

I was so startled when I signed on and saw I had five new reviews for this story! Thanks for dropping by :)

Thanks so much for your compliments on Dorcas' character. I put a lot of thought and effort into her and her actions, and I'm glad you appreciate them.

The plot of this story is what got the whole character of Dorcas going in my head, so it's good that you can see it.

I've just finally worked out the spacing issues (I don't know how that happened in the first place, but it did on multiple chapters) and I'm sorry I know it can be distracting.

Thanks!

~Cassie


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