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Review:Moondanser83 says:
I listened to the song before even reading the story. How a Carrie Underwood song got by me I have no idea, but I liked it! And I have to say you couldn't have picked a more perfect song for this piece. Throughout the story you can actually feel the storm raging, Astoria's fear, Draco's determination... Your descriptions make their emotions almost tangible.
I love your portrayal of Draco. I've always had a soft spot for him, and believed that there is much more to him than the whinny bully he is usually described as. This story shows that he does have a heart, and that after surviving the war he was able to find the courage to do what he knew was right.

I love that you show the growing relationship between him and Astoria, it never occurred to me that they might have been childhood friends.
As far as Astoria herself, your portrayal is chilling. I particularly loved the line:
"At Hogwarts she was a figment of her own imagination..."

The frightened child who grew into a terrified woman, forever defending the man who made her life a living hell right up till the moment she was rescued. And what an amazing rescue it was.

When Draco was watching her dancing in the ashes of her personal hell you could actually feel the relief flowing through both of them. And that moment when Draco finally saw her for the beautiful woman she had grown into instead of the frightened child he had known nearly made me tear up.

Over all you did an amazing job, and I only noticed two minor typos:

"Astoria heard the stores about her father" -stories
"He had been living off of blood money for yeas" - years

Can't wait to read more of your work!
Much Love
~Moon~

Author's Response: Ahhh it's such a good song, isn't it?? I heard it on my way to work, and then things just started turning. But the time I got to my office, I knew that I just had to write this fic!

I loved Draco's drive in this, also. Especially because he could have done so many other things to get rid of Mr. Greengrass, he had the power and the contacts to to so, but he chooses to use the right side of the law to help free Astoria from that terrible man.

I loved the end with the house, I just felt like she would need to get rid of every single reminder, and that house was a huge one.

ooops! Thank you for pointing those out! Silly fingers!!

Thank you so much for this incredible review, and for an awesome swap!! ♥

Jami

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