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Review:lia_2390 says:
Hey :)

I was very excited to see you post this story for the review exchange. It's been sitting in my favourites' list for a while, and now I have the excuse to review it.

I love this story idea! Here you presented the readers with a well-known character - Viktor Krum - who was a celebrated athlete. In his prime every child wanted to be him, girls probably wanted to marry him too. But almost 30 years later, he's sitting in a nameless, almost void place against his will. He's been accused of carrying on with the daughter of the girl he once dated (again over 30 years ago). If you were going for a shock factor, I didn't have to go further than this prologue.

The scene setting here is well written, but I wonder if there isn't more about it that you can tell us? Mention of the white-washed walls, and the narrator's mention of it being a madhouse leaves me wondering what this place really is. Of course, this is only your prologue, and you don't want to give away too much.

I think you started this off really well. As a reader, I'm left with tons of questions - most importantly - how did he end up in this place? This is Viktor Krum! I also love that you chose him because he is who he is (if that makes sense).

Lia

Author's Response: Thank you, Lia. I'm so glad we got matched up for the review exchange this time around. I started reading your story this afternoon and am really enjoying it!

I have to admit, I didn't have much of an opinion on Krum either way when I read GoF, but he's been an absolute blast to play with here. He had so much going for him as a teenager, which means there is a lot I can put him through to drag him down (which sounds horrible, but you know what I mean) .I wasn't intentionally going for a high shock value when I started this story (though I knew the age gap in the pairing might not be for everyone), but the line about Hermione definitely seems to be hitting that note with people. I meant it more to illustrate just what a jerk the man in the suit was, but it's taken on a bit of a life of its own.

You make a good point about being too vague in the setting here. While I definitely meant there to be a lot of ambiguity about what was going on and why, when I wrote this scene, *I* actually didn't know for sure where Viktor was being held. Now that I have a better sense of the story, a few additional details might need to be added.

Thank you so much for the review!


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