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Review:apocalypse says:
I KNEW IT!! I KNEW THIS WAS GONNA HAPPEN
SOMEDAY! OH MY GOD! I KNEW THAT KAT WAS
PRETENDING AND I KNEW THAT SHE'D BE
DISCOVERED SOOON!! Aah! I'M SO HAPPY
THAT GWEN WAS THE ONE WHO DID IT! YAHO!!
*jumps around like an absolutely crazy person* YES! YES! YES! Oh, yeah! GO GWEN!

Phew. I just had to look away and take few deep
breaths before I could come and type this review!!!
Really, I got EXTREMELY excited! When I started
reading the chapter, I wasn't really expecting all of
this to happen. I thought that everyone would
actually like Kat and she would act all nice and
perfect to gain their favour. She did do that in the
start but then WHOA. The tables turned suddenly
and everything was amazing!

I loved the plot twists. And yes, to answer your
question, they did work for me very well. I was
actually very surprised that everything just...
happened, you know? It was an amazing feeling
reading the entire chapter and I can't really
describe how much I enjoyed it! Really VERY good
job! This chapter really out shone the previous ones
and it really shows how brilliant you are as an
author! It shows your ability to plan everything and
really compliments your writing skills. WONDERFUL
JOB! :D

Ooh, yes. The emotions! I think Gwen really acted
perfectly throughout the whole thing. The entire
scene was written perfectly and her anger and her
yelling was very well justified. I LOVEDLOVEDLOVED
her reaction! I think I felt the same way as Gwen
did; VERY angry at Kat. :P But I was also
triumphant and felt victorious that FINALLY
someone had defeated Kat and her evil plans. Gosh,
how extremely evil she was.

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED MOLLY! I don't know why
Gwen didn't like her; perhaps her perception was
wrong :P I really really liked Molly and her devious
personality :P You've characterized her very well; I
think her thinking and her blunt attitude really suits
her. She was exactly the kind of person who
could've really helped Gwen and I am very glad she
did. Her boldness and her cunningness (if that's a
word :P) was very impressive and very well written.
Great job with her! :D

I really liked the entire plan she made with the
potions. You wrote that part very well and there
were instances where I really believed that they
won't be successful but I am SO glad that they
didn't get caught and were actually able to carry
out there plan. The point where Kat spits into the
potion; AH. Time really stood still at that moment. I
felt like I was reading TOO slowly and really wanted
to jump ahead at the moment where she's finally
discovered. Boy.

And JAMES! OH MY! I can't believe what he must've
been feeling at that time. I really loved the way he
acted throughout the scene and really thought that
his attitude and his behaviour were written
perfectly. OH MY GOD! I just realised! I mean, HE
just realised, DIDN'T HE?! He just realised that he
REALLY IN LOVE with Gwen and that's why he said
it, right?! RIGHT?!

The ending was perfect. It really was. I can't wait
to see what happens in the next chapter and how
James will realise what he's been missing for so long.
WHY ARE ALL JAMES' LEAVING?! :P Sorry, hehe.
There are two other James II/OC stories I'm
following in which James left the OC just like he did
in this story just now. AH. I love James Potter in
every story! :P

Oh and I'm very very sorry for being so late with
your review. I've had very hectic two weeks and
now my school's opened which has been taking a lot
of my time. I really hope that you forgive and that
you like this review. I really loved this chapter and I
can't wait to read more! UPDATE SOON! :D And feel
free to PM me if you need any kinda help or advice
:)

Also, I read your comment in my review thread on
my previous post. Thank you SO much for that! It
really means a lot to me that you like my reviews
and that they matter to you that much. Really.
Thank you. :)

Until next time, Happy Writing! :D

-Cal

Author's Response: Haha, I'm bouncing here too, just because your review is so awesome!

But anyways, I'm glad you liked it ^^ Quite a few important things happened in this one and the plot is finally moving again!

And thank you, you really are too kind. But I'm just super glad that you liked the chapter so much! I'm quite fond of it too (:

Haha, it's good to hear that. Because someone really needed to punch Kat! And Gwen was more than justified for the job!

I'm glad you liked Molly! She was such an important character for the story, even though she has such a minor role in it, so I wanted to give her a real personality, to make her stand out. I'm happy to hear it's working!

Haha, I love those moments! And I'm incredibly happy that I've managed to write one ^^ it's just amazing when a story sucks you in so badly and you're completely in the moment of the scene.

We'll see d: I can't really tell you that here without spoiling the story from everyone else too d: you'll just have to wait d:

Haha, maybe that's a common flaw for all James's? They really need to start acting up, so they won't need the time outs ^^

Don't be sorry! Although I'm sorry too for taking so long to respond! I can tell you all about hectic RL so I completely understand! I've had such a busy month and I didn't have any time to write, but now I'm at it again and chapter nineteen is about 80% finished! So it should be out soon!

And no need to thank me! You definitely deserve all the credit for your awesome reviews! They always make me beam so much and are the most helpful! So thank you!


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