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Review:CambAngst says:
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As you did in the last chapter, I thought you did a great job of capturing the Black family in all of their twisted, conflicted glory. Poor Sirius is basically a prisoner in his own family and Andromeda seems to be the same. Bellatrix is fiendishly evil. She just doesn't care what other people think. Walburga and Cygnus are so caught up in maintaining their appearances that their children's well-being is mostly an after-thought.

“'Mummy, what’s a mudblood?' a small girl with pigtails tugged on her mother’s leg. People around her gasped, more mutterings filled the air." - I loved what you did with this line. It highlights how offensive the term is, even back in this era and gives us a great indication of just how far out of touch the Black family is.

Dorea and Charlus's entrance is beautifully timed and you manage to actually slip quite a bit of character and plot development into a relatively innocuous section. It was almost coy! So James is actually first cousins with Walburga and Cygnus, making him a generation above Sirius, Bellatrix and their siblings. This definitely fits nicely with the idea that James's parents were elderly. I like it better than some tics I've read where the author places an "unknown" generation in between Charlus and James. At any rate, I'm certain they spared Sirius from a horrible scene at the train station. It was a really clever way to set another canon plot line in motion!

Remus's section gave us a very interesting look inside what it's like to struggle with lycanthropy on the other 27 days of the month. I thought the way that some of the other students think of him as having this perfect life tied together nicely with the holiday scene you laid out in the last chapter. Remus Lupin is a child who's carrying so many secrets and living out so many lies and contradictions. It's a miracle that he doesn't just explode! In the end, he can't even be completely honest with his best friends. I feel very sad for him.

Peter's section was really heart-warming and intense, all at the same time. I really liked how you managed his mishap with Mary and Amelia. They both seemed to be at about the right level of maturity for First Years, even if life is aging Amelia prematurely in some ways. They laugh Peter's antics off. The encounter with the Slytherins was really well done. You created lots of tension and reinforced Lucius as a villain. Yet the other Marauders managed to come to Peter's rescue and Peter even turned out to be the one who helped them get away, albeit by accident. I did find one little, bitty typo in this section: "James, Sirius and Remus stood at the other end of the corridor – they’re wands raised." should be "their".

In spite of the supremely angst tone, I think the final section was my favorite. James finally gets the slap upside the head that he's needed for... well, probably for a really long time. And it comes by way of Lily, which makes it that much more impactful. He clearly isn't a bad kid, just just has no idea how wonderful his life has been. He doesn't seem to understand that life can be hard and not everybody has two doting, wealthy, elderly parents who absolutely adore them. I also like the direction you started Lily off in. Most fics seem to portray her as coming from a middle to upper-middle class background, which doesn't really seem consistent with the idea that she and Severus grew up in the same place. Sirius's walls start to come down a bit, as well. All in all, I think James began to make that long, slow turn toward being a better person in this chapter. But I'm sure he'll have many mis-starts on that journey.

Aside from that one, small typo, your writing was terrific once again! Everything is so easy to follow and you do a great job of blending narrative and dialog and mixing up your word choice so that nothing sounds repetitive or singsongy.

Another splendid chapter!

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