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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! AditiDraco95 here with your much delayed review! I am so sorry for the long wait!

Wow, I must say this was a hauntingly beautiful story. The imagery was impeccable, I was really drawn in entirely while reading this. At first, I couldn't quite understand what was happening, but I got the hang of it as we moved on.

Your writing style is quite unique here, but very captivating. The emotions were quite tangible throughout as well and I could feel what Rose was going through. The "come sugar" lines were a cool addition. I think this story would be great if made into a podcast too!

All in all, I really enjoyed reading this - a different and amazing piece of writing. My only little piece of advice is to revise your opening/introductory paragraph. It does not make that much sense, and I think if it flowed better, the readers would be more inclined to delve further into the story. Apart from that, great work!

9/10

Cheers!
AD

Author's Response: Hi AD! Don't worry about the delay - I'm a very patient woman! Thank you for reading and reviewing! :)

Wow, thank you for the wonderful compliments! I like that you called it "hauntingly beautiful" because it's definitely not butterflies and rainbows, but I think it has some redeeming qualities.

I'm over the moon that you thought my style was captivating! Maybe I've taken way too many English classes, but now I worry about my style and all that literary business when it comes to my stories. Maybe I will request it to be podcasted! (I'm Southern, you see, so I don't really like to podcast my voice).

I'm sorry that paragraph didn't make much sense. The story in its entirety is stream of consciousness, so it doesn't necessarily have to/need to make sense even if I want it to, you know? I try to keep it raw because I believe that it's 'art for art's sake.' The first paragraph was meant to me a reaction/reflection to the terrible incident - it's a testament to the idea that the past is always intertwined with the present.

Thank you so much for your lovely review! I really appreciate it! :)

Shelby


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