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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
You never fail to make my day, even if this is only the second time. (:

I really love how tight James and Lily are gripping that string of friendship between them. Things just keep getting more and more awkward between the two of them.

You do a really good job explaining both of the characters' feelings to the readers. From the start of the story, why James isn't asking Lily out anymore was very clear to most, if not all, of the us.

You have such a way with imagery. I think it's one of your strongest points, and you should definitely 'harness' -for lack of better word- it more. Great things could come out of it!

I did spot a one or two typos along the way, and I'll just quickly point them out to you. :)

He tiled his head, his eyes curios and nodded.
- The word 'curious' is missing the letter 'u'.

"...There wasn't must to talk about anyway."
-I'm assuming by 'must' you meant 'much', right? Ignore this if I'm wrong.

Again, another lovely one-shot. I cannot wait until the two of them get together! :D

Looking forward to number three,
Izzy xx

Author's Response: Oh gosh. Your reviews make me smile so much :)

It's so much fun writing James and Lily at this point in their relationship. I almost want to draw it out even more and make things even more awkward. But I won't because I'm so excited to write them together! :D

Thank you for that advice! I love writing imagery--I've been making more of an effort to include it in my writing and it makes me so happy to know that it's appreciated. :)

And gah, I admit I'm horrible at proof-reading. But thank you for pointing those out! I'll definitely work on being more thorough when I do a last check before posting.

Thank you so much for such a lovely review! The next chapter should be up soon! I hope you'll like it :)


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