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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! Here from review swap!

So this story caught my eye because it's about Hufflepuffs, which is my favorite house. And I'm really glad I got to read it! I think you're off to an interesting start here, and I think there are a lot of devoted Puffs who would like this :)

I think the way you've set this up is really interesting and creative: starting off with the present, and then mixing in glimpses of the past. I've never seen a story done that way, and I really like it! I'm curious about the other Puffs that you'll use in future chapters.

Helga's story is so sad, and I really felt for her. I see her as a motherly figure too, and not being able to have children would be so devastating for her. But I like that you've made her strong enough to rise above that pain, and be a good teacher to her students. I enjoyed reading her :)

My only critique would be that I didn't really get a medieval feel when I was reading from Helga's POV. Her voice sounded very similar to Annalise's, and I just didn't feel like I was going back in time when the POV switched. Maybe some more formal language would help, or a little more description of how things were different at Hogwarts back then. I think that could add a really cool atmosphere to this :)

I love that you mentioned house elves! Helga was the one who made Hogwarts a safe haven for them, and it was so cool to see you bring that up. (I'm sort of a Founders fanatic, so I love to see those little details.) It adds a lot to the compassionate, nurturing Helga you've shown us.

I enjoyed this! Thanks for swapping with me, it was a lot of fun! Keep up the good work :)

--Maggie

Author's Response: wow thank you so much for this wonderful and kind review! founders era is a bit scary for me as I dont like the older tone so I knew I wasn't going to be able to hit that at all but maybe someday I can go back into this and fix up the chapter a bit and add in those small things you mentioned that would make it better. I'm glad that you enjoyed the bit about the house elves. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review!

~Slytherinchica08~


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