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Review:magnolia_magic says:
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This was so cute! I really like George/Angelina as a couple, and I love your idea of having Fred and George switch dates. That's something I haven't seen, so props for your creativity! And I think you do a great job of writing the twins' dialogue...it seems exactly how they would talk to each other in the books, and I loved all the little one-liners :)

The flow does seem a little choppy at the beginning before the dialogue starts, because you start a new line after almost every sentence. I think you could make it feel more natural by using paragraph form instead. But once you start using dialogue, I think the rest of the piece flows a lot more smoothly.

Like I said, I love your idea, and I love how George isn't afraid to tell Angelina how he feels. That ending scene was just so adorable! It made me smile. This one-shot is great for a fluffy, light read, and I enjoyed reading it!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hello fellow Hufflepuff-ian! :p
Aww thanks, everyone always seems so determined that Fred and Angelina dated, but I always say that if I had an identical twin I'd switch with them.
And then I thought of Fred and George who would be cheeky enough to actually do that :p
Yeah, I did have a bit of a problem with the flow when I was writing it, maybe I'll go back and edit it soon :D
Thank you so much for reviewing :D


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