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Review:academica says:
Hey! Stopping by for Review Tag :)

I like your OC, and I like the concept of the story. Next-gen prankster stories aren't really anything new, but it's nice to see Scorpius being portrayed as a jokester instead of James or Fred II. I also didn't notice any big problems with technical errors (grammar, spelling, and punctuation). I think my main critique at this point would be that I think you could include more imagery and slow the action down a little to improve the flow. For example, I would have liked to see more detail about what kinds of ideas Spencer and Scorpius generated on the train. I also felt like the ending sentence was a little bit abrupt and might have served better as a starting sentence to the next chapter. Overall, though, this looks like the start of an interesting story :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you for stopping by.
They really aren't are they? I hope later though, mine will escape a few cliches.
I was really worried about that actually. I know in my next chapter I explained things a bit more but I'll go back and edit through this one. I have a bit of a problem with being too concise.
I'll take a look at that sentence, if I re write part of it anyway, I would end up changing it anyway.
Thank you for taking the time to review. It was really helpful. :)
Emma


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