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Review:Cavell says:
Holy crud, Laura, I can't believe it - this chapter was as beautiful as the last. And I'm not saying brilliant or fantastic or excellent or awe-inspiring - I say beautiful because that's what this story really is. It's so darn beautiful because you take your precious time with description and you let your writing style when you let us read this chapter, and I'm so honoured to be the first to review this chapter and the last, which technically makes me the first reviewer of this story :p

Your first lines - urgh, I'M SO JEALOUS. I can't believe it, hmph. Some authors like to shove their readers right in the action, some (like me) go wherever they think it's right and fitting, but you - you, Laura, you actually like to think carefully and start where you think it's best, you don't just write one down randomly and hope for the best, judging from how precise your first paragraph was. You didn't ask about this when you requested, but I wanted to point it out anyway just because I wanted to :p

You switch the flow between the different realities so seamlessly that I don't realise you've done it until I suddenly find myself thinking wait, wasn't Gilderoy just the boy a minute ago? You do it so carefully that I know that everything must have been thought-out and planned really, really well. I usually don't plan my stories, myself, so I admire your stories :) I found the realities in this chapter more interesting than the last - probably because the last was the first and you were experimenting and stuff - and way more detailed, since first he was in Mungo's, then he was the boy and then he was with the Minister and gah. It's not confusing, trust me. It should be, but I am able to keep up with it.

Another character introduced? At first, I was scared since this story was so unfamiliar territory, but nope! You made Millicent Bagnold fit in effortlessly in J.K's very carefully-crafted world, almost as if Rowling had made her personality yourself, so well done! I definitely think she has actual purpose in this story, so don't worry about that. Gilderoy was definitely good, though. He's so out of it but so not all at the same time, which may be confusing for others, but it's fitting for his situation and don't you dare go thinking he wasn't the same Gilderoy in the last chapter because he was.

This was a gorgeous chapter, and I'm so pleased you requested it in my thread so that I could read such a masterpiece :) Feel free to re-request for the next chapter when it's up, and good luck with the rest of the story! I know it's going to be brilliant.

--Linn

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