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Review:JessiesGirl says:
Hi there, JessiesGirl here for the review swap.

Wow, a school for squibs? Darn, I wish I'd thought of it first. I think you've got something really original to work with here, it'll be interesting to see how you go about developing it.

I also enjoyed the dash of humor you've employed - you actually had me giggling at several points whilst I was reading this which I can tell you is quite the achievement. Your characterisation of Molly was interesting. It's nice to see you've broken the popular stereotype that usually involves her being a pompous, swotty pain in the backside who bears an extreme annoying resemblance to her father. I mean who would have imagined: Percy Weasley's daughter - a squib!

The only criticism I can make is about the amount of description you have applied to this piece. I just found it all to be a bit too vague and generic; there were times when I really struggled to form pictures in my head to match up with what you were saying. I realise that this can be a particularly difficult feat to achieve when you're writing in a first person narrative but if you took a few moments to allow us to hear what Molly hears and see what Molly sees I could imagine myself enjoying this a little bit more. Don't get me wrong, I still enjoyed it, but I think there is definire opportunity to improve on that particular aspect of your story.

On another note, I really like the writing style you have here. There were no glaring errors or mistakes and everything seemed to flow nicely.

Overall a very solid 9/10. I really enjoyed this!

- Katherine

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