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Review:The Last Marauder says:
Hi there, I'm here from the Gryffindor Review Tag.

I really liked this, it was so simple, yet so brilliant. You took something really normal, really everyday and you made this great little short story about it, and I really loved that! Fantastic idea! The simplicity and normality of it just really make it. We've all stayed up studying for exams really late, and that sandwich or biscuit and cup of tea can just really make you smile as you are stressing out, pouring over books and trying to learn useless facts/formulas that you will never need again once the exam is over!

I loved how James kept this all a secret. He didn't reveal that it was him that gave the sandwich and that just made it special. It's his secret, and I definitely think he would have ruined things if he had told her it was him.

You had some really great lines in this too, I loved this: "Ham and cheese = Happy Lily. Even with my decent grades I couldn't figure this out before?" - it's a simple gesture and a simplee act, but it's perfect, and when James realises this, he can't believe he never thought of it before. Great stuff there.

Also really loved the last line too: "I have the best secret in the world. I know I made Lily smile, and she has no idea." - it's just a brilliant way to around things off and end the story.

Okay, I better finish up before I start to ramble! Well done on a great little one-shot, I really enjoyed it - thanks for writing it! ;-)

Author's Response: :D Ok, first, thank you for being the 25th review! I'm excited, it's kinda funny 'cause this is starting to get up there with my short stories, but people love it so much that it really shouldn't be too surprising, but always is :)
Next, I cannot emphasize enough how I loved that you put the quotes in that you liked best, they're some of my favorite too, I liked the beginning with Peter too lol. It's ok to ramble, it's fun to hear how excited readers can get. Yes, this was a very fun, sweet, but somehow real moment for James. He has his arrogance but in a way that is really more for Lily than his amusement :) Thank you so much for the review! It was great to see you again :)


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