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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
*fan-girls*

Aww! That was such a well-written, cute and awesome one-shot! I'm so glad you're planning to have a collection of James/Lily one-shots published! I have something new to stalk. ;) (That was not meant to sound creepy, by the way!)

I love how you characterised James as a very determined character and despite all the pushing Lily did, he still stood by her no matter what. I think you have a really great talent when it comes to writing James/Lily! This one-shot is just so sweet. I thought the fact that you ended this not a kiss, but a trip to the kitchen was very refreshing. It was very surprising too.

I did spot a tiny 'error' (not sure what I should call it!) though.

"I've had the best years here. All the things I've done with Sirius, Lupin, Peter, all the Quidditch games...,"

When it came to Remus, James called him 'Lupin'...I mean, shouldn't it be 'Remus' because they were best friends and he called Sirius and Peter by their first names too.

Anywho, I thought this is a really great one-shot and I sure am looking forward to the next one! :D

I love James Potter.
Izzy xx

Author's Response: Aw, you're so sweet! I'm happy to provide you with something to stalk :P Haha no worries, it didn't sound creepy at all!

Actually, it hadn't even occurred to me to end it with a kiss. I think its because I felt like at this point in their relationship, James wouldn't have wanted to ruin their new friendship by doing that, and that he would have felt like he was taking advantage of her while she's at such a low point. I like to think that (despite his past history of asking her out) he wants to wait till he's certain/somewhat confident about her feelings for him :)

And oh gosh, thank you for pointing that out! I was too excited about posting to notice lol.

Thank you so much for your review! I hope you'll like the next chapters :) Also, I love James Potter too. I need to find me one in real life :P


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