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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
Haha! I'm glad I inspired you to write that one-shot. Thanks so much for joining my challenge. I'm back again for your second review! Can't wait to see what Freddie says this time around.

In fifth year, James asked if she was a mail order bride. Chopper never responded, but James said his toothbrush tasted weird the next day. He promptly replaced it.

^ I love the way you have Freddie speak to us. Or is it think? Well, whatever it is I love it. Everything he says, even if it's slightly sad about his family can make me chuckle. You write teenage boys so well. Are you trying to tell us something Mistress? Are you really a man?

No. I'm joking. Don't take offense to that! I'm just being silly.

Ah well, just finished the chapter and that Ryan is something else. I know you have wanted to write a pregnancy story for quite some time and you really have the drama in there. I appreciate the humor but also the real life thoughts and discussions. When I was their age I think I would have had a worse reaction if something like that happened to me. Even now, I'm not that much older than them, but I think I wouldn't know what to do or what I would want to do. It's a tough subject and you're handling it nicely. I kind of hope that it's a really hard road for them because a lot of stories I've read the couple falls in love, which is great, but they're never really stressed or all their friends are happy about it and the family barely bats an eyelash sometimes. I know you're going to do something different. I think it would be sad if she didn't have the baby to full term (an accident or something) but it would be believable because it does happen. I'm just putting it out there.

Author's Response: The one-shot was so much fun to write. Just a random extra thing.

So glad you like Freddie's voice. I gave him more of a present-tense voice sort of just rambling. He's figuring himself out through prose. And I AM ACTUALLY A BOY. SURPRISE. Ah, yeah, no.

I completely agree with you about the stress-element. And I noticed the actual pregnancy and the baby is usually in the background of hpff pregnancy stories. There are entire chapters where it seems like it just disappears for the sake of a snog. And that's not really life. So even if this story isn't nearly as popular as those, I wanted to throw a lot more reality in there. You'll see as the story progresses that both Freddie and Ryan have tragic pasts they're both running from and running into.

Thank you so much for the review!


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