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Review:academica says:
Hi Dan! I'm here with another requested review!

I was in a pretty bad mood this morning because of issues going on with my advisor, and I thought maybe I could procrastinate a little and go ahead and do your review. I'm glad I did - your story took my mind off my RL troubles momentarily, and I wanted you to know that I feel better because of it.

Anyway, on with your review :)

So, another action-packed chapter! I really liked the beginning with the four protagonists working on different parts of the problem. I think you characterized their little mannerisms perfectly. I also liked Esme's discussion of memories as being like fragile threads - because those things really don't look like they could stand multiple cycles in the washer, you know? It was nice for Hermione and Esme to have a little bit of 'girl time,' and I thought the merged memory setup was neat, too. It reminded me a lot of Inception in terms of going in and actually planting false memories.

I'm not shocked that Tennant is unreliable, nor am I surprised that he seems to fail at being an Auror. No wonder Lady Tenabra is losing patience with him. He was pretty foolish to try to stand up to her like that, and I like how she just methodically made a note that he would need to pay for it.

Ron and Hermione's infiltration of the Ministry was my favorite part of this chapter. I love the characterization and how flawlessly Hermione acted as the infamous Mrs. Zabini. You'd think men would stop being attracted to her once they caught a whiff of her reputation, huh? I've never read of anyone going straight from one Polyjuice form to another, so it's interesting to see how that can work. I also liked the ending to that chapter, with Susan stepping in to help in a moment of need.

As always, I'm intrigued to see what happens next. Good work - I hope this review is helpful to you :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: OK, I'm completely embarrassed. Somehow I must have neglected to click Submit. Sorry for this being late.

Anyhow, I'm glad that this lifted your mood! Unfortunately, the "fun" chapters grow fewer and farther between from here on out.

I had a lot of fun with memory magic in general in this story, and specifically playing around with the idea of Esme knowing lots of very advanced techniques for manipulating them. It's such a fun area to explore. I do think that memories, like anything else, would eventually "wear out" if they were viewed too much and especially if they had been manipulated.

Hermione and Esme's private conversation sets up a few things that are coming, so I'm glad you liked it. Esme is starting to grow on the people around her, although she pretty much had no way to go but up after dinner. ;)

Yeah, Tennant is a jerk. Not even a likeable jerk. And he has an awful tendency to pick the wrong enemies. More on this to come...

I really, really enjoyed writing Ron and Hermione in the Ministry. It was one of those rare opportunities to just let my sarcastic side go and have fun with dialog. Poor Hermione is miserable enough as it is, then she has to act like this horrible old lady. It would put anyone in a foul mood. And, yes, Susan is there when they need her. I adore Susan. She's my favorite supporting character by far.

Well, the pace continues to accelerate from here. Thank you so much for all of your wonderful reviews and sorry for messing up the response!

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