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Review:Athene Goodstrength says:
Hi! Just to let you know, Iím typing this review as I read, so it might be a bit of a train of thought!

The ambiguity in this is beautiful. The way it starts without the reader really knowing where this is, or whatís happening, or who is experiencing it, forces them (me!) to really soak in the details and imagine this dark and beautiful world. We can only take in what the narrator takes in, and it soon seems that his perception of the world is not entirely trustworthy to the (mostly) sane reader. I really like the way the scene is so peaceful at first, and then as the narrator looks at the other figure in the room and remembers the lights and noises, it quickly becomes horribly apparent that this is not a beautiful, peaceful place.

Now, having seen your banner Iím presuming this is Lockhartís POV. This definitely reinforces that thought: ďTo go where no man had ever gone beforeÖ it sounds appealing, he muses to himself, very appealing. He would be a hero, hailed from the rooftops, his name headlining every paper in the country, his face emblazoned across book covers and posters and people everywhere would know him, would love him and adore him.Ē ... itís beautiful.

Youíve captured such a wonderful, yearning, confused fragility here. Itís easy to laugh at Lockhart, but I think when Harry sees him again all the humour has gone from the situation, and the same goes for here. The sensitive and, yeah, sensual, way you capture this manís broken psychology is wonderful to read.

And then! This story goes off in a direction that I would never have guessed at! I feel like Iím in a fog when I read it, like there are images swirling around but itís hard to grasp at them. I think maybe that comes from seeing it through Gilderoyís eyes. I love the relationship youíve created here, the tenderness but the inequality between them.

You also conjure up a ĎMaraudersí era Hogwarts that I donít think Iíve seen before in FF. I havenít read anything about Regulus before, but the relationship he has here with his brother is so perfectly characterized - the image of him hurting Sirius, of Sirius hurting him, and the whole school knowing about it. I particularly love your take on them both being demanding creatures.

Again, to go on about your characterization... This bit about Sirius made me smile because itís just so perfect, so wry and it even has a little nod to what we know about Animagi: ďthe elder Black often shows the sensibility and attitude of a four month old Labrador, running into everything and everywhere because it looks interesting and shiny and new and excitingĒ.

I know some people hate reading slash, but I donít have an issue with it, particularly when youíve taken two seemingly entirely disparate characters and created this wonderful tender, tense, narrative relationship between them. And itís no leap of the imagination to believe that Gilderoy Lockhart could be gay.

Your language is beautifully crafted and employed and your characterization perfect. I canít really say much more about all of that as thereís not much more to say - youíre a fantastic writer, clearly!
I could just gush about this chapter all day but unfortunately I have revision to do. I will be adding this to my favourites and reading Chapter 2 when I can! Thanks for reviewing When You Go, too. I really enjoyed this review swap!

Athene xo

PS. I just looked at your forums profile and I could literally copy/paste your likes and dislikes onto my own. Except for the French pop, and also I like singing.

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