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Review:Athene Goodstrength says:
No! That twist! It did make me cry!

Even without the twist this would have been a great canon retelling of Ginny's POV during the battle. There are so many great lines, I can't even pick them out. You've really thought about what Ginny would be thinking and feeling and I love that. The way she wishes she'd been less shy and they'd had more time together, the way she hates Voldemort and knows that he is lying.

My favourite bit was her take on the battle between Molly and Bellatrix. I particularly loved this line: " Mum fought not only with her wand, but with her heart." The only criticism I have of that bit is that Molly's eyes are stained with the tears of losing Harry. I think Fred deserves another mention at that point!

The moment where Harry protects Molly made me suddenly realise that Harry has truly come full-circle... His mother protected him, saved his life as a baby and now Harry is able to protect the only mother he's truly felt cared for him since the death of Lily. It's like he's giving something back.

Then that twist! Oh my. I think I'm quite cross with you. Not because it's a bad twist, or badly written, but because it's such a SAD twist, so well written! You really captured the sudden change of mood, reading it I felt like it all happened in slow motion. Everyone's reactions were great, especially Hermione yelling for Madam Pomfrey.

There's something so cruel and shocking about it being the 'Sectumsempra' spell that kills Harry, particularly as we know Snape created it and that Harry has only recently found out the truth about Snape. Sad sad sad!

I was so shocked that I didn't get teary eyed until this line: "Hermione rested her head on Ron's shoulder, both of them crying harder than ever before. You deserved those tears. Every single one. "
...and then this made my eyes even more prickly: "But there is no one on this planet like you. No one."

...and then this made me feel angry: " It wasn't fair, I thought, wiping away my tears. Why did you have to die so early? You were forced into war and battle and you had no choice."

...and then the final paragraph really got me. SO beautiful, so sad, so haunting. It's very vivid too, I can imagine the breeze blowing Ginny's hair and can almost see Harry looking down at her.

This was wonderful (if upsetting!) and I'm glad I followed your status update over here! I didn't see any spelling mistakes, which made it really easy to just enjoy, and until the twist your canon-work was perfect ;)

Well done!
Athene xo

Author's Response: Gah! Athene! Thank you so much for this amazing review, it totally made my day! :D

I'm so used to writing from Ginny's PoV now, haha. Probably because I'm writing an entire novel from her PoV, so I can really 'get into' her mind.

I am so glad this made you cry! (Er, that sounded a bit mean but you know what I mean. :P)

You're right, I should have mentioned Fred at that part. I'll probably edit that in. I guess I was so focused on Ginny that I forgot about Fred! :)

I know, I might sound like a real creep but I wanted to kill Harry in a cruel way, haha. :P

Thank you so much for pointing out your favorite lines! I am so happy you thought I did a good job with this piece, and thank you so much for leaving me such an awesome review! :D

~Rosie


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