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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Elenia! I LOVE YOU! I knew it!! YES!!! *Punches the air in victory* =)

Okay... so onto the review now that I got that out of my system...

This was an awesome chapter from start to finish... I loved Molly Weasley Jr. It's always the quiet ones who hold all the information. I am so glad that she finally was able to approach Gwen and let her in on everything. I loved how they made the potion and how Gwen just filled hers with water. The cleverness that you put into this story and this chapter is just so amazingly wonderful. I was not surprised on how Gwen reacted when she found out it was a lie. She went postal. If that doesn't scream I love you James Potter then I don't know what does. I liked the twist of having Roxy perform the spell since she was there and in training and lets not forget about Harry...wow I don't think I have ever read a story where he was this angry. I could feel it in your words. It was very powerful! I also liked how he was able to give Gwen good news about her father. I am not sure what to think of that quite yet. I was feeling blue when James left. I felt horrible for Gwen. She should have just kissed him and told him everything...yeah I know about Joshua, but I kind of feel like he may be playing a part in all of this baby no baby stuff. Or it could just be my wild imagination.

All these twists and turns are great I love them all. I loved the length of the chapter. At first I was like wow 10+ words, but it flows so smoothly and the plot pushes the pace to move quite quickly. It left me continuously wanting to know more which in turn made me read a lot faster.

I would have to say that yes, I think that the emotions of the characters seemed practical and real. Gwen responded just as I thought she would. I was laughing a lot as Fred and Teddy couldn't figure out what to do. They all worked well.

I think Molly is now my favorite character in the entire world! =) She really got James out of a huge bind that's for sure. I am glad that she finally opened up to Gwen about what she knew. It was like they instantly bonded when the other potion didn't turn a color. I also liked Molly's remarks. For being the daughter of Percy she has quite a lot of spunk that makes me like her all the more.

The ending was sad. I mean you get that sense of euphoria in the begining and yeah you cheer like a crazy person when you find out about Kat's lie, but the ending really makes you think. What is James feeling. I noticed that he didn't say I love you sis. or anything like that to Gwen she just perceived it that way. I maybe reading into things, but that is just what I thought. He realizes that now he's the one in the other position looking in on a relationship. He knows he can freely love Gwen and not ever have to deal with Kat again. It's like he was hit over the head with a hammer and all of these thoughts are just too much for him to process. He'll get there though...or at least I hope he will.

Side note: Grammar was perfect and I didn't see anything that was confusing. This was a really well written chapter.

Keep up the awesome writing! =) I cannot wait until the next chapter!!

-SR17

Author's Response: Haha, I had a feeling you might like that twist (;

I'm so glad you liked all that about the chapter! A lot of things happened, and they were all quite important. I was a bit afraid that the chapter might have been too overwhelming d:

Oh, and Harry's reaction. I'm glad you liked that too. I didn't even consider making him react differently, so it's good to know it's working (:

Yeah, I considered that a long time. Should I cut this in half, or should I just keep it like it was and hope that my readers won't get too tired while reading it. But I'm glad it doesn't feel as long as it is (:

Haha, yeah. She kind of exploded d: well, who wouldn't have in a similar situation. It wasn't the best way, but I don't think Gwen could've reacted any differently, even if she got a second chance.

Really? I'm glad. She's just a minor character in this story, but such an important one so I wanted to give her a real personality. I'm glad it works (:

We'll see. It'll all be explained at some point, but for now I can't say a thing d:

Thank you so much for such an awesome review, once again ^^ I loved it so much! And sorry for taking so long to respond to it, I've been quite busy lately and just didn't have the time >.


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