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Review:EverDiggory says:
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Plot: This is cute! I really do love Ron/Hermione and this was such a cute beginning! I love stories like this, and I'm surprised by how good of a story this is for a first story!

Grammar/Spelling: There were a few mistakes here and there, so I'd recommed requesting a beta on the forums(:

Interest: There's plenty of interest! You really managed to hook me on this story, so I'm looking forward to reading more.

Characterization: While they both seem just slightly, slightly OOC, I enjoy reading it. I've never been a stickler for canon or anything, so I enjoy it. I really would like to know more about the characters, and see your take on them. You assume we know the characters, and we do!, but its improtant that you describe your take on them and characterizae them as though we don't.

Imagery: I would really, really like to see more of this. I liked the description of the intended to be therapeutic blue walls, but other than that there wasn't much description of Hermione or Ron's appearance, or their surroundings. imagery really brings the story to life and I think it's definitely important to have.

Emotions: I feel like we get most of the emotions, but it seems to me like perhaps you should describe the emotions more? I can sort of guess, but the goal is to fully explain to the readers what the characters are feeling.

Thanks for requesting!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing! :)
I'm glad you liked it and I've took your advice adn requested a beta on the forums, so thanks for that.
I'll keep your CC in mind when I edit it and thanks again for reviewing! :)

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