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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hello! I'm here for your review request!

I'm sorry it's been a few weeks! August has just flown by me without my consent!

This was quite lovely, I really like Regulus but unfortunately I don't read enough of him! So i'm so glad that this story featured him in his brightest of moments. It's a really important moment too because it's there we realize that Dumbledore died for something that had already been done.

So it was interesting for one to see that part repeat itself and parts of it did remind me of Dumbledore's experience with the locket. Which was nice to see the continuity with that and grounded this piece in canon.

I really liked how the dynamics of the family was explored here. It's really interesting to see how much Sirius was so loved and it killed me to think that Regulus was made to feel inferior to anyone. But it was drilled into him as a child and it would make sense that he would both love and hate his brother. Also, what would drive him to try to be brighter. He looked in so many different ways to distinguish himself and it didn't seem he found it till the very end. I'm also a big fan of themes and the theme you had here with the stars was really nicely done and fit in with your piece perfectly.

I also liked how at the end of his life and when the madness overtook him he thought of his family and those huge moments of his life. It really helped flesh Regulus out as a character and made me sympathize with him. I just wanted to hug him and tell him not to give up on life.

The challenge prompt seemed a bit oddly placed and didn't really suit the mood. I think it could have easily but when i read it, it seemed more disjointed and threw me out of the story. Maybe if there was a better lead up to that emotion, a stronger sense of his fear or confusion of his act and it might have fit in better.

I also sort of expected more pureblood supremacy from his parents. We know from Sirius that they believed that Voldemort had the right idea and even though that doesn't have to be a prominent plot point i think it should have been mentioned a little more than it had to really help characterize Orion and Walburga better.

Other than that though, i really enjoyed this and it flowed fairly well, there were some grammar issues but nothing big that really disrupted the flow of the story. I really enjoyed the description and narrative as well, it is a really well written piece and i'm so glad you requested from me! feel free to stop by me thread anytime :D
-zayne

Author's Response: Hello!! It's fine! I understand :D I didn't even realise that it's nearing the end of August until today :(

I'm glad you said that because I actually had to research everything to do with the cave to try and make it as accurate as possible (with the exception of rowing the boat - I thought a minor uncanon moment there would be okay :$) so I'm really happy you do think it's canon.

I think I've always had a soft spot for Regulus when learning about what he did. There's so much mystery behind the dynamics of the Black family and I think that Regulus was just so interesting to learn/imagine about.

About their parents, I only decided to show their feelings towards the two boys. My main idea was to convey how much love they had for Sirius because he was the true heir, but I do guess it woudln't hurt to add some snide comments :P

I'd like to thank you for reviewing this piece! I really appreciate it :D


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