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Review:BellaFan202 says:
I'm really proud of myself for getting this review to you so soon. :)

When it's talking about how Ron is saving his money for Auror Training, you wrote "That was a small part of the reason he hadn't did his Auror training with Harry," but the 'did' should be a 'done'. Probably just a typo but I thought I would point it out.

There are a few other typos that could be fixed with a quick reread of the chapter, like somethings that aren't capitalized that should be or vice versa (Dept. of Regulations and Control of Magical Creatures, for example) a couple commas where there should be a period or semi colon ("I thought to day was your day off; why were you doing paper work?"). A few misused or misspelled words herea nd there. There are just several random typos. I would recommend either reading what you write several times before you post, or getting a beta. Or maybe even both, would be the better choice.

And now about the story:

I liked it. I wasn't too drawn in at the beginning and I could foresee her being pregnant, but it's good and I like it. However, I can't really picture Hermione being so tolerant of him making a big, crumby mess in her living room, or making him food the second he walks in the door. It just doesn't seem like a Hermione thing. I also don't really see Ron automatically asking for a sandwich. He's a big boy, he can make him own food. I'm not trying to be mean, this is just my opinion; you don't even need to listen to it. :)

Thanks for requesting. If you want me to review the next chapter, don't forget to request the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for revieiwing! :)
I'll look into getting a beta and thanks for the CC, I'll take it into account when I edit the story.
I'm glad you liked it though and thanks again for reviewing! :)


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