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Review:academica says:
Hi! I'm here with your requested review :)

I think you did a good job developing your OC enough for this short piece, and I like the sense of ambiguous morality that you've written about. I could tell that Georgia felt afraid about what was to come, and it was difficult for me to tell whether she was actually regretful about her crime or if she was more filled with anger - which one was churning her gut, you know? I like how you set up the metaphor of seasickness as an expression of Georgia's confusion about her crime and dread at facing the punishment for it.

One critique I had is that I'm not sure why you chose the disarming spell. Given that it's supposed to bring someone else's wand to you, I don't know exactly what it would do to a Muggle. I think Stupefy might have been a better choice there. I also would have liked to read a little more about how she got into this position - it sounds like her spell was sort of accidental and not intended to kill. Is she arriving at Azkaban after several convoluted trials? How long is her sentence? I'm still curious.

I think my favorite thing about this piece is the imagery. Personally, I find that imagery shines best in emotionally-charged and brief pieces like this one, and yours is no exception. For example, I liked how you described the body at the end of the memory and the wind in the present time. I really got a sense of the foreboding atmosphere and felt like I could understand your OC's fear quite well. I didn't spot any major technical errors, so that's good, and I think the flow was pretty good as well.

Good work! I don't tend to give "brutally honest" reviews, so hopefully this was helpful to you :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reviewing :)

I'm glad you liked Georgia and the morality- to be honest, I'm not sure if what she did was right or wrong- and she's flicking between regret and anger as well.

The Disarming spell was a reflex, something she just did on the spur of the moment- and it has been known to 'knock someone back'- for example in PoA, so I used the spell like that.

Thank you so much for review, you have really helped :D

- Jenny


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