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Review:Aether says:
Hi, it's Aether from the review tag.

This is a really dramatic piece. I feel that the details and description in this story really enhance the angst that Sirius feels. I think, for some reason, the part where you say that the "bitter cold gusts of air couldn't numb him forever" really solidified everything that Sirius was feeling.

I could really feel for him, especially when he pulled up to the house, even though I already knew what he'd find.

In the beginning of the one-shot I was a little confused about what was happening. I felt like one moment he was reading the parchment, and the next he was in the air. Maybe a transition would clear that up?

Either way, excellent one-shot!

Aether

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this wonderful review! This is such a heart breaking moment for me to think about! Hmm I will definitely look into adding more of a transition, though with the every word counts challenge it has to be exactly 500 words (apart from the AN) so I'll also have to see what I could remove..

Anyway, thank you so much for this wonderful review :)!!

Jami


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