|Review:||The Last Marauder says:|
Hi there, here from the review tag in the Gryffindor common room.
I had to read this three times, not because there was anything wrong with it or anything, but just because I felt it warranted so many readings to take it all in.
This is so powerful, so moving, so sad and just so unique. You really took these pairings and characters and made them completely your own, and I really loved that.
I thought you did Tonks perfectly, in such a few words you captured her depression and how much she loved Remus and how much that love simultaneously made kept her alive and nearly killed her (if that makes any sense at all). It's so moving how deeply she cares about it, how she loves him so much and just wants to heal him, to provide him with some form of happiness in his dark world, and in order to do that she is willing to use her abilities to become Sirius for him (at least in appearance). It is beautiful and it is moving, but it is also incredibly sad as well and you conveyed all that so fantastically, the writing was brilliant, honestly it was.
Then Remus's piece was just fantastic, utter brilliance. I loved the stream of consciousness effect, how the absence of punctuation made each sentence smash into the next, conveying these frantic, broken, grieving thoughts. The words "when Sirius was there" - become like this refrain and they have an innocent ring to them, like they are something a child would say, which really expresses how vulnerable Remus is feeling. I love how you intertwined thoughts with dialogue - it just created a brilliant effect, really great to read.
I really don't know what else to do you, this is really brilliant and just leaves me speechless. 10/10 - fantastic job, the best fic I've read in weeks. well done. :-)
Author's Response: Hi! Sorry I took so long to respond, real life got in the way.
Wow. Thank you so much.
Tonks was a difficult one to write because she's so fast-paced, and the characters I usually write are all introspective and moody (and all male :s) so I'm glad that worked for you. God, that was an understatement. I'm not just glad, I'm actually ecstatic that you thought it was so brilliant. Thank you. Again. :D
The stream-of-consciousness thing... wow. This is the first time in a while that someone's actually mentioned that they liked it. I'm really happy that it didn't confuse the hell out of you, then.
(Though the dialogue thing was just me not using speech marks 'cause any punctuation would break the flow of the story. I'm not as good a writer as you think I am. :P)
Thank you for this lovely review, and I'm really, really happy that Carelessness resonated with you. :)