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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Hiya! living.free from TGS here to review for the review exchange! :) I like that you're writing about the Peverell brothers, especially since I haven't seen a fanfic on here about them. The Peverell brothers aren't mention much in other fanfics, nor are they really brought up much in the books (just in DH in the children's tale of the three brothers in the Tales of Beedle the Bard). It was also a unique spin on Ignotus's boyhood, however I have a bit of feedback on the dialogue in this to make; these characters as children aren't speaking like kids, but instead in rather complex sentences. For instance, the conversation that takes place between Ignotus and Anastasia; a six-year-old girl would not speak in such a formal way. I understand that people were more formal back in those ages, but I still would not expect children to speak to each other that way, nor would I expect Ignotus speak of Cadmus's behavior in misusing his magic at the beginning. But other than the unrealistic dialogue, the concept of the story is unfolding nicely. Keep up the great writing!

Author's Response: Hello! First of all, thank you for this review! I really do appreciate the criticism; I do need pointers when it comes to novel-length stories.

As for the maturity of the characters, some of it has been put in there purposefully but at some points, it was unintentional. I have found a way to work with that though and hopefully, the characters will seem more natural in the following chapters.

Thanks again for the review! :D

-Manno


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