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Review:EverDiggory says:
Definitely not left as a one shot! You have so many end to tie up(:

Flow: This was a little choppy, but it's an easy fix. Try transitioning sentences rather than page breaks or whatnot;P It will help smooth things out!

Characterization: I think we learned a lot about Rose, but I would like to see more from Ron and Hermione. I loved the letter from Draco, it had a very draco-vibe to it.

Believablity: This was okay, but I find myself wondering how in the hell would Rose not know who Draco Malfoy is? Maybe it's just me, but I see him along with the trio and many others involved in the war being quite a hot topic. In my head canon I see him being in the headlines a lot, it just makes sense. Maybe it's because she's young, or I don't know;P

Imagery: I would recommend adding more of this. It really brings a story to life. If you find imagery difficult, try writing like you normally would, then go back and add it in the appropriate spots.

Grammar/Spelling: I would recommend getting a beta, there were a few mistakes here and there, but its no big deal!

Thanks for requesting!

xx

Ever

Author's Response: Hey thanks for reviewing! :)
Thanks for the CC, I've took your advice and I've got a beta so hopefully it will help! :)
Thanks again for reviewing!


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