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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! Maggie here with your review!

This chapter was fun because we get back to the Lucius we saw at the beginning; arrogant and cunning and all of that. You do a really good job of writing him that way, though I will be interested to see how his character develops in the future.

Narcissa is well-written as always (I loved her dialogue, as well as Lucius'), but I was confused as to why she left the Great Hall with him in the first place. Was she really afraid of being by herself? She doesn't seem like the type. But then again, Hogwarts would be pretty scary at night when it's all dark and empty, so maybe it's understandable. It just caught me by suprise, since Narcissa seems so independent.

I wasn't suprised, however, to see that Lucius had gotten his wand back without anyone knowing. It shows that he'll do anything to get what he wants. And leaving her stranded on the staircase! So mean, but just what I'd expect from him. Like many of your readers, I'm looking forward to seeing how Narcissa chooses to get back at him :)

Your description was especially good all throughout this chapter. I loved your word choice and the way you took the time to set the scene at the beginning. It really makes for a more vivid read, and I enjoyed that a lot :)

Thanks for requesting! I think you've got a fun story here, and I'm interested to see where it goes. I'm going to be closing my review thread for a while since school is starting next week, but I will check back every now and then for updates :) And if you ever want to PM me with a question or something, feel free. Great job!

--Maggie

Author's Response: As always, an amazing wonderful inspirational review! I tried to make this chapter as random as possible. A lot of people thought it would be a cliche night where they would talk and bond, but BAM, he suddenly leaves her on a staircase floating in midair. *EVIL LAUGH AND WALKS AWAY WHILE SHE CURSES HIM IN HER MIND*

Next chapter will be up soon, thanks bunches!! xx


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