Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
Yeah, so you just broke my heart that much more. (IT'S A GOOD THING I SWEAR)

The way this opened, with Fred and George talking about the casualties at Hogwarts and all that, was incredible. I've read more George – after – Fred – dies fics than I can count, but I've never seen him written as well as this. And yes, it was a dream and George wasn't physically /there/, yet you still wrote him perfectly. It felt like he was there, and it made sense in so many ways, because Fred and George did seem to share thoughts and feelings so often. I've always been of the opinion that a small part of George died with Fred, and that's exactly what you did here. They were separate, and yet they were the same and it was all written so beautifully. I read those opening paragraphs a few times just because of how amazing the writing is.

I'm usually too lazy to copy/paste lines from the story, but this one stood out to me so much that I had to. It's an entire paragraph, but I had to seriously restrain myself from just pasting the entire chapter, so it's actually quite an accomplishment :P

If he could have chosen anyone to die for, it still would have been Percy. This way, Percy would never, ever turn his back on his family again. That guilt would calcify into a sense of what was owed, what he should always be grateful for. He would be a better son, a better brother, a better Percy than he had ever been or would ever be were it not for Fred's death.

I died when I read that. It takes a lot to give me a fresh perspective on Fred's death, and I had pretty much given up the idea that I'd ever find something different. And then you threw this at me. It makes so much sense, though, that this is what Fred's death did. I've always felt like him and Colin (ironic, actually) were the two that JK Rowling killed off just to create more pain, but here you've managed to give a bleak positive outcome. It's completely changed my perspective on Fred’s death, and not a lot of authors could do that. Yet another mark of your brilliance ♥

And the enddd. It was like "BUT THAT’S EXACTLY HOW I FEEL". Because it would just be so amazing if Colin won at something (Fred's used to winning, and as much as I absolutely love him, Colin deserves his chance) and I would totally be cheering for Colin if it didn't mean that Fred would die. And at the same time, Fred's less innocent that Colin and it wouldn't be quite as bad to see him kill Colin as it would if Colin killed him, but that means that Colin dies and Fred's a killer so either way, this is an unsolvable conundrum. Though it's sort of reassuring to know that Fred feels the same way xD

PLEASE JUST GIVE ME MORE? LIKE NOW? TOO MUCH SUSPENSE AND EMOTION. Wednesday is way too far away itneedstonbetomorrow. But another brilliant chapter and I can't wait to see what's next. If you give me a Colin chapter along these lines, my next review might be unintelligible gibberish :P

-Naida

Author's Response: *gives you lots of hugs for your feels*

Aww, that's such a sad but beautiful thing you said, about a tiny piece of George dying when Fred died. And you know, I think you're right. And now I've got this strange image of Fred walking around Cliodna's Clock with a piece of George inside him, like a horcrux. HORCRUX GEORGE.

I took a few liberties with the whole Fred dying for Percy thing, but if this inadvertently happened, and Percy was aware of it, just imagine how that would change Percy forever. I don't think he would have enough room in him for being smug, pompous, and selfish after such an event, because he would be so flooded with gratitude, with guilt. He would owe it to Fred's memory to make up for every irritating thing he'd ever done. I think that if we could see through a looking glass into Percy's future, he would be so much more humbled than the Percy he used to be.

Bahaha because by the time I'm responding to this review, tomorrow /is/ Wednesday. :3 Tomorrow's chapter provides insight into multiple POV, and the chapter coming after it is Colin's. Mostly because I'm evil. XD

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 118
Submit Report: