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Review:luvinpadfoot says:
I wonder what else is happening with the Wood family. It sounds like more than just a nasty divorce, especially if Char's getting upset about it. What's the deal with Oliver at the Ministry? The curiosity is killing me, I can't wait for more!

And I'm glad Charla isn't hurting herself like Rory is. That would be too sad for words, although I'm not quite sure she really can handle it better. I'm glad she has James to lean on.

I love that their relationship seems to be progressing! It's so slow and natural, nothing at all seemed forced. I could see this happening in real life. For all the drama surrounding their lives, the relationship itself seems so sweet and perfect.

James's jealousy and reaction to his father was great. I believed every moment of it and it really makes his character deeper. It's obvious he loves his family, but when Al doesn't even care about Quidditch the jealousy is perfect. It adds a whole new dynamic to James and his relationship with his family that I'm eager to see played out. Especially more with Harry.

A few misspellings that I noticed, but nothing major. The other thing that bothered me just a little was the bedroom situation. I can't see parents letting them share a bedroom, no matter how mature they are. But that's just me.

I only really have one suggestion for this chapter and that's to work on the adults. Especially in the letter Ginny sent James, she didn't sound very much like an adult. Just listen to how adults talk and try to emulate that in your writing. It might be more noticeable because your voices for the teenagers are so perfect and hers isn't quite there. The dialogue between the adults seems better, but the letter just read like a teenager.

The characters are all so thought out and well developed. I know I say this almost every chapter, but it's true! They're the best parts of this story. I love reading about everything they're going through because they seem so real!

Such a splendid chapter! I love the way all the different elements are heating up! Obviously I'm excited for the next chapter. :) Still loving it, just like always!

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