GONNA GET THE PLANT! WOO! but seriously, I am kind of worried about what's going to happen when they find it. Will Hugo be disappointed/will he go mad with power? I doubt that, but then I'm not so sure about Neville and Scorpius (yet)
"Hugo's nose was pressed against the lake, his arms spread on either side of him, hugging the surface. Scorpius knew he had eyes only for the fruit below them." Pure lies, Scorpius, Hugo only has eyes for me ;) I adore this boy and his hugging ways. I feel like we would get on extremely well.
The way you are able to get across all the characters' points of views is brilliant. You can go from Neville, to Hugo and Scorpius within a couple of paragraphs, and yet it flows so well. This is a truly great skill to have, and one which you use extremely effectively. (there, that's my serious bit done ;))
"Hugo cleared his throat and tugged at his collar." Classic. I like it.
"giving him a small clap clap! across his left cheek. The dangling earring--it looked like a scrap of metal--in Scorpius's ear rocked back and forth as Scorpius slowly looked Hugo in the eye. There was both what looked like resentment and amusement about his features" Kinda reminds me of Ryan Gosling in 'Crazy, Stupid, Love' except for this time, Hugo is actually both crazy and stupid (and my love), whilst Ryan Gosling was pure phwoar-esque material.
"he hadn't prepared his eardrums for the shock. It is okay, little drums of the ear variety, he thought consolingly. You are all right." aw, that is too adorable. Only Hugo would talk to his body parts like they have feelings (although really, doesn't that mean that he's talking to his own nerves and feelings, if he's consoling them for being hurt?)
He's holding it like a long-lost teddy bear! "and Hugo huddled it to his chest proudly, a warm feeling rising between his lungs. He hugged it very tightly", Well, that's the way I feel about my long-lost teddy bears anyway. When I somehow understand how to infiltrate this story, Hugo will cuddle me like this.
"They were possibly the most beautiful creatures Hugo had ever seen./Well, besides his vintage Cleansweep 7 and probably the watercolor painting Rose had made him of the giant squid devouring Slughorn were just as beautiful." Only Hugo could think that Rose's painting of such a morbid topic would be beautiful...I like to think that he has it hanging over his bed at home, and he admires it every night before he falls asleep, singing little lullabies to himself and his army of small, stuffed teddy bears.
"It was the shape of a woman, but obviously not a woman because women were not made of air and leaves." That's what you think, eh Hugo...h3h3h3.
NO. WHY WOULD YOU DO THAT TO SCORPIUS?! I get why he's happy (because he saved Hugo, right?) but WHY? :'( so sad.