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Review:daretodream says:

So I've actually been meaning to read this story for a long time...I just have the attention span of a 3 year old, so I always forget.

I love your writing style. I think you're really funny, and you manage to be that way without the one liners seeming to be out of place. Millie's thought process is hilarious mostly because it's believable. The funniest part is that it is easy to imagine someone actually thinking like that, it's not ridiculously out there.

I think Berkley is my favorite character. And what is this, a male best friend the main character won't fall in love with? While those can be wonderful stories, this is just refreshing. Berkley is everything the obnoxious female best friend always aims to be, only he goes one step further. He's male. I love it.

I think the flow of the story is fine, and I'm really interested in the suspense of who she saw kissing who at the breakfast table. Obviously, this was a bit of a big deal, if it prompted this sort of change.

I really like the title of the story. I think it's funny and unique and it will draw people in.

The only negative thing I have to say (and it's a small one at that) is that you have a few typos in here. Only a few though, they're not obnoxious or distracting. They're the kind that are bound to happen, even if you read over your own writing, because the words aren't spelt wrong, it's just the wrong word, do you know what I mean? It happens to me all the time, because when you read it over, you know what it is supposed to say, so you don't notice that one letter is off.

You might have someone already looking at those, or already be aware of them and are going to change them when you edit, but if not, feel free to send me a PM and I can message you the ones that I noticed.

I absolutely loved this first chapter! You did a MAGNIFICENT job! 10/10


Author's Response: Hi Cassie! Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving me such in depth reviews! Your input is very much appreciated!
For some reason this story makes me really nervous - espeically on the humor front - and I think it's because the main character is nothing like the one from my other story so I'm not as comfortable with it yet (but I'm certainly getting there!) It's not as in-your-face humor and I'm always worried that it's not coming across so I'm glad (and relieved!) that you think it's funny!
Everyone loves Berkley, haha! He was an immediate fan-favorite when I published this and I'm so happy about that! And thank you for all of your lovely comments about his role as Millie's best friend! I'm so flattered! Male characters can be a bit hard for me sometimes but Berkley is definitely the one I'm the most proud of.
And thank you for the reassurance about the flow; this is the first time I've ever written in the present tense (I'm finding that I love it!) so sometimes I'm unsure of how I'm doing with it.
I'm glad that you like the title; I'm still a bit iffy about it so I'm trying to get an overall census on it.
Thank you so much for your offer! I know exactly what you mean and I'm definitely going to take you up on that and send it over. Having another pair of eyes is a big help; I should get a beta but my updates can be slow at times and when I finish I just want to get the chapter out. So thank you; that's a really big help!
I cannot thank you enough for looking this over; I really appreciate the thorough review and all of your compliments and criticism! Your input is really great!

~Jess :D

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