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Review:RosieQueen says:
It's Rosie with your requested review! :)

So what I really liked about this story was that it mostly focused on characterization, more specifically, Hugo's characterization. When he was describing how parents use him as an example for their sons, I concluded that Hugo thinks a little bit too much of himself, or to say that he's big-headed. I'm not saying that's a bad thing, in fact, I found it interesting. I find characters with big egos very amusing. :P

Hugo Weasley prided himself on having the perfect life; he didn't pride himself on being perfect
^I don't know why, but I really liked this sentence, it made so much sense and I understood Hugo better.

One thing that really bothered me throughout the story was your italics usage. You tend to italicize every other word, even where a stress isn't needed. It made the flow seem choppy. I would recommend reading this over and carefully considering each italicized word and think if a stress really is needed there.

Overall, this was a very good one-shot. I thought it was really cute and fluffy. (It sounds like I'm describing a teddy bear oO) I enjoyed the simplicity of this piece. Keep up the good work! :D

~Rosie

Author's Response: oooh thanks so much for the review! this definitely helped (:
huh, i never thought about the italics.
thanks for letting me know; i'll definitely look over that and change it wherever necessary.

thanks so much!


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