Rachel - Jane - ohmygosh, I can't remember which is actually your name *face-palm* forgive me, but anyways - I lost all track of time, I'm so sorry for such a horrendously late review :( Still, reading this made me feel loads better.
The first sentence instantly gripped me - and it was such a good start, too! How on earth do you do it? The fact that it was Ron's POV interested me as well, as I wanted to see how well you'd do with his since you've already finished Harry's with flying colours, and I'm glad to say that you did really well! I always thought that it would be rather hard writing boys, but you pulled it off perfectly. There wasn't too much description when you were speaking from Ron, and somehow you found that perfect balance when writing him :)
I like your metaphors! They just add to your awesome description skills, which are amazing! It's weird seeing everything from Ron's view, since I'm so used to the scene being from Harry's, but hearing his thought are interesting because it doesn't seem like you're repeating anything and that you just made up the scene all by yourself even though I know perfectly well that it was J.K. who plotted the whole 'Harry-is-dead?' scene and you just expanded it with Ron's view and I'm rambling aimlessly, aren't I? :p
OHMYGOSH, this is an epic AU :o I didn't know what would happen afterwards since the last bit of canon I remember was Neville killing Nagini - but wow, you exceeded any expectations I might have had for you and woah woah woah I'm seriously speechless o.O No - why are they losing? *cries* Your description makes me feel like I'm there and I'm so scared for them and what the heck's going to happen next?!? (This is my bizarre way of asking you if you terribly mind re-requesting so that I can read the next chapter :p Even if you didn't, I'd read it myself anyway)
(Sorry for the mostly rambly, gushing review, I can't help it!)
Author's Response: Ahaha! My real name actually is Rachel, but so many people call me Jane that I respond to it instinctually, so you can use either. ;) And please, no worries about the review! It's always great to see someone stop by, no matter when the review is left, and you certainly don't need to be feeling bad about it. :)
I'm so happy you liked that first sentence! Starting chapters is always kind of hit-or-miss for me, but this beginning just kind of popped into my head, so I'm tremendously happy you liked it. I love writing Ron, because he's got such a fun voice to write in, you know? Even here -- he sees things differently than Harry, and it's neat to explore. I've written him a few times now and always love it. I actually think I like writing male main character more than female ones!
I actually had to go back and find metaphors in this to know what you were talking about. :3 Similes and metaphors aren't something I consciously put into stories -- they just sort of crop up -- but I'm so super happy you liked this scene. And I was actually rather worried this would seem too much like I was borrowing from canon, or copying it, so you've really, really alleviated some of my fears to that end! Thank you!!
I say this is my first time writing AU, but in reality, all my stories are, just a bit. (I mean, inserting original characters into canon events and having them change as a result... that's pretty AU!) But this is the first time I'm /changing/ canon events, so to speak, so I'm honestly just so pleased that you like it so much. :3
I'll definitely be by to re-request! Thank you so, so, so much for such a sweet review on this story. I honestly can't tell you how much I appreciate it. ♥ I hope to see you back very soon for chapter three, as well!!