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Review:Wistful says:
ohmygod.
I'm just so sorry.
I shouldn't have taken so long to review.

This is Wistful with your long requested review *sorry*

Alright, Julia, here we go ^_^ *waves glittery baton*

Wow. Great first chapter. I just love how in the beginning you wrote about the friends interacting. To be honest, that is how friends should act and you wrote it incredibly well! You could tell they got along well and they really were rather good friends. Good job with that. I love your characterization so far. I'm getting a glimse into each of their persona's and thumbs up for you. Lily definitely seems like Lily, same with James. Very canon. I can't say with the OC as they're well OC but you've got a good start in developing them.

You opened the chapter pretty well, though I usually don't like when it starts with dialogue, you pulled it off. Now ot the even more important part. It was hilarious. At one part, I ended up giving my mother a fright when I bursted into laughter randomly while I was reaidng it. I just ove tis chapter so far.

Plot, plot, what can I say about plot? Nohtn really, as you just started and I don't have a clear idea of hwere you're going with this so far. Still a good start though. Flow? I can definitely ramble about flow. You seem to have good word choice and no awkward sentences which is always brilliant. Its flows... epicly *nodnod*

Brilliant start, Julia!

-Wistful

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