WOO! I am back on the reviewing front! (although I swear I've already reviewed this...) I reread the prologue and am in love with Hugo all over again. Honestly, how can one boy be so adorable and at the same time be almost 16 years old?!
"Hugo frowned in the smirking way that he thought was pretty cool and sat down next to Marcus" I am assuming this means that it isn't cool, and thus I am picturing him dribbling as he does it.
"Marjie said and reached across the table to tweak his nose. He frowned, scrunching his face. "You know, you're only two years older than me, you don't have to act like my nan," he said, rubbing the throbbing proboscis." Too adorable. I shall see how I feel about this in the next few chapters... (and then knowing me, I'll explode from my feelings)
I think I like Marjie at the moment though: ""Eh--this information may or may not ring a bell," Marjie said." although I will forever love Hugo for this: "You make the weirdest faces sometimes. Like you're a cartoon character or something." She made a face./"Ha, ha." Like I know what a cartoon character is, Hugo thought, smirking."
I now should say something about the way the story is written, the narrative voice etc, but I like it too much to be able to think of anything resembling what I did for English Literature A level, and thus will just continue enjoying reading such a lovely piece of writing :)
This...is brilliant. Neville, oh how I have missed you: "No, it was something genuine in Hugo's eyes that had arrested him so and caused him to ponder the state of his being./Shrugging, he turned back to his roasted tomatoes."
This boy. There are no words to describe the love I feel for him in this moment: "She'll think, 'how dashing he looks!' and then she'll ask me to the Yule Ball. But wait, I'm a fifth-year. I can ask people to the ball. Du-uh! So I'll ask her. But the rest of the plan…I'll still carry it out, like planned." I want him to ask /me/ to the Yule Ball! ;)
"He almost realised, for one split second, why Scorpius was always saying that she was the loveliest girl the the whole world" dawh, stop it! I've just finished Rachel's 'And Now a Word...' and am feeling too many shipper things!
Oh Scorpius, I never thought you'd care so much, and it makes me love you even more. "something like being an incredibly talented Quidditch player, or being a total flop in his classes. Anything, really, would far surpass in status a dribbly chin and wide, irregularly-winking eyes." I think this bit is my favourite bit so far. You've changed Scorpius so much from all the other stories that have been written about him, and I really like him. He's just...genuine. A proper human being. And I really like this. (and I can't believe I got all of that out of one paragraph)
Oh Hugo! "But he ended up grimacing, like he always did. Lucky for him, Hugo could interpret a grimace as anything from a wail to a smile; his own motivations were hardly important." He is just too damn cute for his own good. And I love the little relationship you have started between Scorpius and Hugo here, it's so lovely and brotherly. A true bromance already. I like this. I like this a lot.
I want to marry him. His alliteration astounds me and I am looking forward to our wedding day and his speech at the reception: "He checked his watch, shaking his head as he saw that he'd just wasted three whole minutes. Silly Scorpius." Honestly, why do I always manage to feel things for characters and then propose to them straight away? Ah well, I don't care. This is too wonderful for me to fret about that now.
I also love the fact that he keeps calling him 'Professor Neville', and the way in which Neville regards him as kind of like a son/younger brother. This is so lovely and heart-warming.
As ever, Lily, I am jealous of your writing skills. And I am also mightily sorry for having not read and reviewed this in so long! I don't understand why I didn't read on, this is just so lovely, and I am completely in love with Hugo (and you of course, h3h3h3). ONWARDS!