Ugh. My heart. -collects herself-
This was positively stunning. I don't think I need to tell you that your imagery is awe-inspiring its in placement and flow, and the way you can paint large pictures and speak of grand things with small words. I wanted to try to pick out a favorite to prove it to you, but I simply could not decide. Whatever it is that you're doing, please keep it up!
The love story here - gah. I don't even know what to say about it, not with words, and I'm so honored to have gotten here in time for the first review (and first favorite, I assure you). I love that it's messy, that it's real, that Lily didn't simply stick her nose in the air and walk away forever from Severus and his awful word. No, she put the knives in him for years afterward and watched him bleed. And she bled too, a little bit, or so it seemed. I think the part that was most heart-wrenching for me was Harry, knowing that Severus could have said anything in that moment but could not take his eyes off of Harry and his mother's final gift.
I love the flow of your stories, too - I love how they're disjointed and poetic, and how they seem to have a non-chronological feel. It's this easy style that I've been envious of for a long time, and you seem to have gotten it down to a science, so kudos to you. I'm going to keep working to see if I can do it properly one day. Anyway, this one is no exception. You pretty much dragged me along on a leash just like Severus from start to finish. I don't think I missed a line eating it up, even so quickly.
I'm recommending this one. I absolutely loved it!
Author's Response: I just posted this awesomely great (lengthy) response and it was deleted. *grumbles*. Shall now try again (and copy paste afterwards, yeh be warned).
You are so sweet. I am a wobbly mess on the floor right now. I mean, holy schomozle. (that's not a word). Thank you so much for all those beautiful and kind words, dear. I've been so nervous and uncertain about this piece so it's amazing being told it's good. It's a lot more description-heavy than I'm used to, but I finally feel like I'm settling into a nice in-between between heavy description and minimalism.
Please tell me my imagery is awe-inspiring again? :P haha I've always been so self-conscious of my imagery and description so this is a huge relief, especially coming from you of all people who's mind-numbingly good at it.
I've always pictured Lily's and Severus's relationship like this. I haven't read a lot of Snilly one-shots, but those I did read were all very light and fluffy or... Snape was a wuss? And I do realize that it was Lily rejecting him in that scene and all, but he rejected her first?
YouÃ¢ÂÂre right: Lily bled, too. Because Severus showed her the world she belonged to, and you don't just forget the person who opens your eyes. I think he would always have a place in her heart, despite it all. This was really about the war she raged too, for the two of them. I wanted to show how naÃÂ¯ve she was, thinking they could defy it all - or good? Good for wanting to do so. Snape had already lost that battle the moment he saw her on that field and he knew it, too. I just always thought it was mutual and the hurt on his side was a hurt on hers too, muted by James's brilliance and Harry's love, but still there. Their relationship is and has always been one I considered mutual in some sense. They were best friends. It was them against the world, until the world ripped them in different directions. ThatÃ¢ÂÂs what the thing about the name is all about. That Snape was bound by blood despite it all. And I'm rambling. Sorry. I do that.
I'll wrap it up now, thank you so so much for this wonderful review, which is probably the best I've ever received. You're so sweet. Thank you so much. (and favorite author? REALLY?) :D I'm so happy. So thank you. You've made my day (and year).