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Review:daretodream says:
Hello!

My guess is that Scorpius got Rose's name tatooed onto his arm! James said it was a name, and he had already commented on the gooey looks that Scorpius gives Rose, so that's my educated guess!

I think you have a really interesting premise for a story here. Especially because what you have isn't really a pregnancy story, but a baby story, which is kind of different.

You've broken a few of the usual stereotypes within next gen stories here. Instead of Scorpius and Al being friends, you have it as Scorpius and James, which is interesting. I LOVE that Al is the one with the fiery temper, because it's a different portrayal of him than we usually get, and it adds to his interest level as a character.

My only concern would be, if your story is already rated Mature, I would recommend changing some of the "fudge" to something different, even if not some of the more extreme curse words. Anything else really. It was a bit distracting how frequently it popped up in the chapter, and I think even just that change would be a big improvement.

Good work!

~Cassie

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