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Review:luvinpadfoot says:
This is one of my favorite chapters so far. I love how you threaded all of their lives in together. Sisi, Dom, Char, Rory, Fred, and James. And the Umbridge/Devil reincarnate. It didn't feel like there were that many different plots jammed in together and it flowed really well!

The ending shocked me. Well, shocked may be a little strong, but I didn't expect Sisi to be upset. It's really made me wonder why she was crying, what happened. Is it something to do with her little sister? Or Fred? Or something else entirely? I'm looking forward to hearing more about her.

That line at the end about their lives falling apart- let me find it. "It wasn't just Charlie's life that was falling apart this year. It was everyone's." I love that line. It's definitely my favorite so far. I think it captured what's going on in the story perfectly.

The little part with Rory made me so happy. I like that she seems to be doing well which I know isn't as dramatic or exciting, but it's hard to hope for anything different when she's involved.

This chapter has made me feel sorry for Dom in a way that the others haven't. It's done a great job in capturing that she feels hurt and betrayed, even though she's the one playing most of the pranks thus far. She's a really great antagonist because she is so complex.

The Char/James relationship continues to be cute. I agree with the other reviewer, she's going to have to be the one to say something because James is acting way too scared! Haha! It's so funny that he acts all tough, but he can't admit feelings for one girl. I love reading about their interactions.

You continue to write James's voice wonderfully! His character shines through so well, as do the others. The characters are the best thing about this story. I'm so invested in their lives and stories because you write them so well!

As always I can't wait to read more! Another wonderful chapter! :D

Author's Response: Wow I'm glad you like the chapter, I really wasn't that happy with it, but if you think it flowed well that was really my main worry. Yes, the other reviewer seemed pretty intruiged by Sisi's problems, hmm. I love Rory and James, they are such lovely people to write about because they both have easy characters to portray. Thanks again for the review, hopefully the next few will be updated just as quickly because they are all ready and written and only need to be Validated.

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