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Review:slytherinchica08 says:
Oh each chapter just keeps getting better and better! I loved the interaction between James and Beth in this chapter especially when he confronts her about liking Snape and not being upset about it at all but being rather alright with it. I thought the ending of this chapter was the perfect touch between Beth and Snape and her realizing that maybe she hadn't completely burned that bridge with Snape yet!

I only found two small mistakes in this chapter. The first is in this sentence: "James ignored him, rifling the copy of the Daily Prophet he held in front of his nose and giving a small cough." I think that giving should be gave, at least it sounds better to me but I could be wrong. Then in this sentence: "I figured Dumbledore knew what he was going, giving someone like that that kind of responsibility" going should be doing.

Something else I liked about this chapter was you including Lily in this more and showing her growing friendship with Beth. It was fun to see her being excited about seeing James play and her being integrated into his life more. As always I look forward to reading more!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: I'm so pleased that you're continuing to enjoy the story! James is definitely meant to play a brother-type figure to Beth, so it's awesome that it's appearing to come across that way. I've really enjoyed writing James in these books, much more than I thought I would! Lily, too -- I loved developing her relationship with James and getting it to a loving, romantic part, rather than her just hating on him all the time, you know?

Thank you again for finding those mistakes! I did keep "giving" in there, because it's meant to go along with "rifling" and I'd need another comma in there if I changed it to "gave." It really does help me out, though, that you're so astute of a reader!

Thanks as always for dropping by and reading a few chapters of this story. It really does mean a lot to me that you keep coming back! ♥ Can't wait to hear your opinion on future chapters, too!


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