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Review:Mihali1432 says:
Oh. My. Bajeesus. What. I have to say that I really think DeAnna is a great little kid character and she acts just how I would think she would! I thought the flow in this chapter was good! And the bridge between this and the first chapter was well done. It worked in my opinion and I thought this was well done!

I wanna say I found a couple selling mistakes like Chocked should be choked. And I found a small sentence somewhere that had the word "the" left out of it, or it would've flowed just a bit better if 'the' was added in.

The end of this chapter though. It was so sad! "Hapy Birfday Mommi" oh my god. That's so... Sad. I feel so bad for DeAnna. :(

Great job and I'll be at chapter 3 soon! :D

Mike.

Author's Response: Thanks so much Mike. I think I may need to take you up as a beta for me lol. I'll have to go through and read it again to make some changes! :)

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