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Review:Pixileanin says:
Hi there! Sorry it's been a while, but I promise that I haven't forgotten about your story! Busy business and all that.

This chapter definitely put a few things in motion, as far as your plot was concerned. Firstly, the tentative relationship that Dorcas has with her mother and her mother's attitude towards magic are going to contribute a lot of conflict in the future. I can feel a lot of frustration and blame coming up... I like the way you wrote dorcas' confrontation with her mother. I only wish you would have worked a little harder to incorporate her mother's back story in with the scene, instead of giving it to us as a prelude. I like to discover things about the characters as we go along more than learning a bunch of it up front.

When Dorcas found that letter on her desk, I just knew it had something bad in it, just like Dorcas did. She's finally realized how serious Bella is about getting her revenge and I hope that Dorcas doesn't hide this from the rest of her coworkers... though, the way you have set up her character, I'm guessing that she's not going to want anyone to know about it. Harumph! Stubborn girl! Reminds me of another stubborn girl... haha!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for continuing to come back, no matter how long it takes!

Yeah as you get further and further into the story, it gets more and more unedited and I don't restructure anything (hopefully it isn't too noticeable :/) When I edit I'll have to see if I could work it in a little bit more.

Why on Earth would we tell other people? That would just be silly. Who needs backup when you have a wand. Don't be crazy.

Thanks for the review!


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