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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hello! I'm here from the Ravenclaw common room for the review battle!

In my opinion, this seems to be such an intriguing story, even though Lavender Brown isn't one of the characters I truly admire. Yet, so far, I like her. Stories about mental issues are always very interesting and have this sort of cryptic feel to them -you never really know what to expect. And therefore, I am eager to see how you're going to go ahead from here.

I also really like the way you're telling this story. The suppressed thoughts that are italicised, the description of the way she passed the nights, the conversations between her and Parvati... It's all very interesting, really. My favourite one was this:

'She is a jigsaw puzzle with a piece missing, but a stubborn child has shoved the pieces back together anyway – not quite fitting together neatly and succinctly, but nevertheless complete.'

It's just so simple and, at the same time, so creative and lets the emotion really get to the reader.

I admire this as a first chapter about Lavender Brown. It just starts right from where we've left her in the books and doesn't go ahead summarising to us her past and the treatment of others to her while she was still at school or anything as such. There aren't any boring introductions and that's really refreshing.

I also can already see how the title relates to the story; it just seems so fitting. I was able to make the connection when I read the very last paragraph, and I thought that this was a really witty move!

Anyway, I'm very glad to have gotten the chance to read this story; this has been an excellent first chapter and I hope I get to read more soon! :D

-Manno

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