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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you! :D So, let's go over things:

Continuity: Okay, I'll start off with the only question that I had about the story--is Katherine Fabian/Gideon's daughter? If so, she would be Fred and George's first cousin, which would be massively awkward if she's to end up in a relationship with one of them.

Characterization: Okay! So we begin with Elizabeth, who is really great. I liked that she was strong enough to stand up to Rowle. I feel like she could have shown more fear since the situation WAS really terrible, but I can understand why you might not choose to write her that way. As for Katherine at eleven...she's not bad. I liked that she stood up to the other girl during the Sorting. She's obviously her mother's daughter, despite being adopted by a Death Eater. Which...for reference, why did he let her use his last name? Wouldn't that lead authorities right to him and he's known for Death Eater involvement? Anyhow, moving on, twins! I liked them both. I think you're doing well with them so far. And I loved Angelina's little mention. I have a huge love of her character. :D

Descriptions: Okay, I tell everyone this when I review--details, details, details! :] Telling readers how things look, smell, sound, feel, etc. can really bring the entire story to life. For instance, we didn't get too many details about how the characters looked, how the platform sounded, the atmosphere in the house when Elizabeth was killed, etc. And all those things can help bring the story to life.

Emotions: Same thing here. :] I almost got some details about George's nerves, but not many other things. I couldn't feel Elizabeth's fear, etc. :/ Adding things in to hint at how the characters are feeling will help tremendously.

Plot: Okay! So we've got an interesting beginning here. I'm intrigued as to why Rowle adopted Katherine. And I'm interested to see how the characters all become friends. This is sure to be a captivating story. :]

So far, so good! I'll read more ASAP!


Author's Response: Hello sorry for the late response XD It's just this was such a long well though out review I had to read it a couple of times before answering.

I always get that question :P no she isn't you'll know who her father is soon.

I love Elizabeth too bad I had to kill her off XD I wrote the prologue so long ago and I agree there should be more emotion in it, I'll edit it when I get the chance :) Ahh like I said the reason for the last name comes up later, I'm glad you like the characters!

Details! Got it :) I'll take this into account when editing.
Thank you for such a thougtful review :) When I edit this chap I'll let you know :)

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