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Review:MagicalInk says:
Oh, I love your Moody! All detective since his early years, and always with his peculiar accent :)

This was probably the most awkward chapter until now. And I dont mean it in the way that it's awkwardly written, oh no, your descriptions are as great as ever, but every line of dialogue showed the tension of their relationship.

The way she's so interested in his conversations, and then him staring at her back. Hormones. And the almost love confession! I really admire Minerva's serenity, how she can keep control of herself no matter the circumstances, rare stammers and able to turn the situation on her favor. I knew she couldn't really be jealous!

And do I sense some mystery coming? I'm glad you introduce a bit of that here, I understand a bit more Grimm's relationship with his father, and I really want to know what Tom is doing! I know it's Tom...
-Val

Author's Response: It's great that you like Moody. :D He was fun to include in this story - it was sort of random, but I liked the idea of adding adult characters from the books and exploring what they'd be like as teenagers. (Umbridge turned out more interestingly, though - oh my gosh I love writing her parts in this story!)

If you think this chapter is awkward between them, just wait a little longer. :P Though I don't know, this could be the point where they're least comfortable with one another. I'll wait and see what you think.

Yes, the mystery part begins weaving in here, setting off the romantic plot and giving Grimm something more to do. Minerva has her Quidditch, but Grimm was left without a real pastime. I'm not sure whether it's actually a plausible thing, but during the War in regular history, one hears of all sorts of spying in the oddest of places, so why not Hogwarts too? (That's me trying to convince myself now of my past decisions for the plot. I'm not sure if it's working. :P)

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! :D


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