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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
THIS MOMENT. Seriously, I think if there's one moment about that night, this would be the one that threatens to tear my heart out the most and you do such a fabulous job writing it. It's short but it's no less powerful than a one-shot that would write this scene in thousands of words. I actually think this length is perfect for the emotion and scene you're trying to portray.

I love the idea of Peter leaving a note. I never actually thought about it before, but it's definitely an interesting way for the readers to see what sort of excuse he could come up with. It's sad because I can understand where he's coming from - the fact that the Potters probably would die and that Peter himself was more afraid of death than any sort of retribution from the remaining Marauders. But just as he wasn't ready to die, I don't think James and Lily were either and I think that's what breaks my heart the most.

Sirius's anxiety is so nerve-wracking! It's hard because he's still a little bit hopeful that nothing had happened, that he was being played and sent in the wrong direction but we, the readers, know the truth. I really love the description of his motorbike, the line about the war cries was especially awesome, and the small details like the frost in his stubble and the tears caught in his dark lashes. Such lovely imagery.

Sirius's guilt (something that I love to write as well) is so palpable here and you do such a wonderful job with that, especially at the end with the fragmentation. I always imagined that maybe that's what Sirius didn't fight so much when they dragged him off to Azkaban after Peter's deception, that maybe he thought it was his penance for suggesting Peter, that in some roundabout way, he was responsible for their deaths. Gah, poor Sirius.

This was heartbreaking but very well-written. I'm sorry I can't offer much more feedback - I'm such a sucker for fics about Sirius the night of James and Lily's death and this was great. :)

Author's Response: Blahh what am I supposed to do about this review?! How am I going to make a coherent response to such wonderful words from a writer I respect so much?!

Let's try...

In my head Dumbledore was fully aware that Sirius was innocent. He had no proof, but he knew. Dumbledore always knows. He tried to talk to Sirius about option, Sirius was broken and basically repeated that it was his fault they were dead. Sirius had decided it was his fault and went to Azkaban willing to serve his sentence until he saw that newspaper article and lost it.

Bahhh why does everything revolving around these people have to be so sad?

I am so happy you liked the imagery, I wanted to make sure to include enough but not too much of it.

Seriously, this was an amazing review and you have made my week.

Thank you for the incredible review ♥


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