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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums here to review for you! :D So, let's go over things:

Characterization: Okay, so we have Morgan in this chapter. I think you've got a solid idea of who she is how she behaves which is great. As an OC, I'll be watching to be sure she doesn't turn into a Mary-Sue, but for now, she's fine. ;] So far, so good.

Descriptions: Okay! So, this is something that I tell everyone that I review for: details can bring a story to life or, if they aren't there, make it fall flat. So tell us how things look, sound, smell, feel, etc. It will bring readers into the story and make things so much more realistic. :]

Emotions: Okay! I loved the disdain that I could sense coming off of Morgan. It makes me very interested to understand her story more and see why she is the way she is.

Plot: Interesting beginning! I like that you've already pulled in enough suspense and drama to inspire me to read more and see what's going on with everyone. I like that you accomplished that! Well done. And her rejection of Draco is sure to make an impact later, so I'm intrigued to see how that will come in. :]

Interactions: Loved the tension between Morgan and Draco. I'm sure it's going to impact the story later. And I liked that there's somehow a connection between her and Theodore, so I can't wait for that to be explained. :]

Style: I really adored the way you wrote this. It was terrific. I liked the narration style and the prologue part before we got into the real story. It definitely peaked my interest. You have a very well-structured style that seems like it will really lend itself to a story like this. Great job!

Okay, so far, so good! This was a terrific beginning. I'm really interested to see where this will go. Keep up the good work and I'll read more ASAP.

--Emily

Author's Response: hey there! Thank you so much!

I'm glad that you feel the suspence and want to read on, it means I did something right! You will see that I will try to keep up the tone throughout the rest of the story (with some exceptions), if you could make sure to point out whether it still works later on, that would be wonderful :)

Details, yes, you are completely right, I often struggle with that since I'm afraid descriptions will slow down the action (which of course does not have to be true at all!). I will see what I can change, thank you, again, for doing this :)


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