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Review:ohmymerlin says:
1. Thor
it wasn't in caps but I had to do it in caps...
because I'm weird
This was a really good chapter, but maybe you should try and slow it down. I felt the flow of it was all choppy and I had to read it a few times because it was a bit confusing.
But the story is really good, so don't worry. Maybe just add a few more details? It's all very dialogue-ish (that is a word and you cannot argue! :p) and a bit more detail to the surrounds might give the story that extra oomph! :D
Still a very funny chapter, can't wait to read more :D

Author's Response: Alright, thanks for the review! I might re-read my story over and see if there's anything I can do to fix it. I will also be sending the next chapters to my friend, who is the spelling-grammar-and story writing expert.
I basically needed a plot, that's why I snuck the little thing in there. It's about to get real awkward.
This chapter was basically a filler chapter. It will have more description in the next chapter.
As for the quote: Right! I had just watched a Big Bang Theory marathon and felt like I needed to put it in there.
And, yes, dialgue-ish is a word.

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