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Review:MysticPhoenix says:
I thought this was a nice take on Lily's struggle with her feelings for James. I really liked the fact that Lily's reasoning was not simply because he had annoyed her for so many years, but instead because she was dealing with abandonment issues. The annoyance was an easy cover up for her fear.

I like how Alice broke down Lily's arguments and continued to go back to the root issue. Though I think at this point using love to describe Lily's feelings is a little too soon. But that is just my opinion.

There were a few errors in wording and sentence structure, but overall the story was good. I enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Yeah, annoyance just isn't enough for seven years of hatred. There needs to be an actual reason for her rejecting James. If it's just annoyance, it's a lot easier to fix then having the fear of being abandoned.

I agree, Alice describing Lily's emotions for James as love isn't quite how I wanted it to go, but it was the only way I liked it. However, it's also toward the end of their seventh year, so 'love' isn't too far off.

Thank you for pointing out the grammar stuff! I'm not exactly Mrs. English Language, but I'll try to fix that.

Again, thank you for the lovely review! Chapter 2 will be up tomarrow or the day afterward!

Shay_Gryff :D


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