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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review to thank you for reviewing the podcasts (whew- bit of a mouthful, that was!).

Wow- I really liked this story. I think that you did a fabulous job with your characterization of Susan. I understood her thoughts and her motivations as she moved through the story- to be afraid of acting because of the previous cruelty that had been done to your family (in living memory, which is even worse) is completely understandable and realistic.

And the development you managed to have in just one chapter! It think that your inclusion of the line "Sorry daddy" made her decision all that much more powerful because she was making the decision to enter the fight knowing that it wasn't what her father wanted her to do.

And just as I could easily understand Susan's point of view, so could I understand Hannah's frustration with her. They were living in a dangerous period and she wanted her friend to be completely at her side, in all things, in ways that she couldn't be if she was just neutral.

As well, your description was fantastic. I really liked how you were able to transmit their emotions through your writing and how you tied in Susan's love of astrology into her transformation. Though you didn't mention it specifically in the story, I could see how the thought of Andromeda as the innocent sacrifice could be applied to Ernie's - or any of the students of Hogwarts, really - situation and how the weak wills of others kept them in that situation.

Your ending was also really well done- I liked how you left it off at a moment that could be taken as a cliff-hanger but also could be seen as the beginning of a new chapter in her life. The last sentence summed up the story beautifully- Susan's fight has only just begun and she will go far now.

All in all, I think that you've done a marvelous job with this story. I haven't read many stories that deal with the time at Hogwarts when Harry, Ron and Hermione were on the run and I think that you did a great job of capturing the terrifying atmosphere of it without overexaggerating anything. There would be no rules, no way to stop them at their own game- only resistance, both subtle and overt. Great work!

Author's Response: Hey Roots!

I'm glad you chose this one, Susan has always been one of my favourite characters to write about! I'm so pleased that this whole thing came across well and that her decision to not be involved made sense. I think that it could have easily gone both ways for her, Susan could be very willing to fight like her family always had or she wanted to avenge them. Or, as i wrote it, and her being fearful because of what happened with her family and having her dad wanting her to survive. I personally think that she might have been unsure about it all which is why i chose to go this way.

It was actually just providence that the Andromeda story fit so well. I hadn't really thought much about it, just chose a random constellation and when i was writing it in i realized how close it fit in with the story i was telling. :D I think you're the first to pick up on it.

It was really fun to write about the Puff's here because we don't see what they were like in the war effort. So it was interesting to explore them at Hogwarts during that time. I was hoping that the atmosphere would be good as we really don't know much about the time there other than there were students who resisted. I'm a bit overwhelmed that you thought it captured that time well though, thank you!!

Thanks so much Roots for this review! It meant a lot to get it!



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